Comment #1
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Comment on Mija Causey’s blog post: “Working on the Alpha presentation. Post 1” It is both reassuring and unnerving to see that other Project Managers are struggling with finding meaningful ways to contribute to their group. Your post is very clear about what you are working on, namely the alpha presentation, and I think you make a clear case for why you are working on it at this time. However, your work process is a bit difficult to decode. While it is certainly the primary focus of a majority of your post, it is not elaborated on as much as I personally would have liked. All the same though, I don’t know how vital any such additional information would actually be for an average reader of this post. I think your post paints a clear picture of your current task and would be an interesting read for any Project Manager in this course. While there are times where you could have potentially elaborated on for example your writing process, I think there is a value to consider in making a post which properly conveys the necessary information without running the risk of boring the reader. However the latter could hardly be a problem when the writer has a sense of humor, as seen here. Is there value in your post? I absolutely think so, seeing what other Project Managers struggle with and seeing how they handle different situations prompts the reader to reflect on their own processes, if not at times presenting them with valuable insight from the get go. Is there room for improvement? I think so, but I am no expert. The only real thing which struck me as potentially in need of improvement was the first paragraph, I think “it is going fine” is a somewhat weak way of expressing something, and I would have liked to see the reasoning behind that. I think elaborating on that statement would also help balance out the paragraph, of which almost 50% is more so a funny addition than a valuable reflection (Nothing wrong with that, I actually find it very funny and it presents a point, but it feels a bit of for it to be the latter half of one of the two paragraphs). Bayond this, maybe try to differentiate the first two sentences a bit more. Aside from that I think it is a very entertaining post which I enjoyed reading.  |