Feedback week 2: Yinsong
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https://yinsongflytrap.wordpress.com/2018/02/14/making-the-sprite-shark/ Hello Yinsong. The blogpost was very easy to digest which is nice. Something I would have liked to see more of would have to be reference picture so where you have taken your inspiration from and kind of what you’re aiming for. I also noticed that the text isn’t as long as it should be, and to be fair, with how clear everything is I don’t really think you need to write anything more, since you’ve pretty much covered everything I can think of in the text. Especially the paragraph by the end about why you chose the left shark is a really nice touch since it shows that you (and your group by extension) put thought into your design. However for the coming weeks I would try to flesh out the blog post a little more so that the teachers won’t be grumpy about the word count. The language and grammar is mostly fine, there are some minor hiccups that feels a little odd. For example “At the end I” should probably be “In the end I”. However these are minor things which didn’t affect my ability to understand the text. It was great read and I wish you the best of luck regarding this and future projects! – Carl Leong  |